Ativan moa

The many mistakes are so distracting- Bria/Brea, Mia/Moa, “Ja’Mal, it’s so magnificent “, no, it was Oman in that scene.

Generally an enjoyable read. Just two nits to pick.
1. A sniper gun guaranteed out to 350yds? Don't know what guarantee is involved, but any good hunting rifle can perform well at 350yds. Sniper rifles are all about accuracy and that would probably be referred to as something in MOA.
2. Only MDs can write prescriptions. No way would a pharmacy honor one from a nurse practitioner and she would probably be arrested for writing them.

Jade needs to work on her psychic power!!! Her breath blast weapons are awesome, but in chapter 117, p.5 she could not use this attack for fear of collateral damage! She needs to practice pinpoint accuracy attacks, sort of like using a sniper rifle rather than a sawed off 10 gauge shotgun loaded with magnum load birdshot!!!
As a complete side note to PLRus, what range are you getting.25 moa. out of a 460 Weatherby? Are you a member of the mile club? (Green (jealous)). My hunting rifle is a 1917 Lee Enfield that I sportsterized and have a Leopold 8x scope on.
Tefler, again you have given us an outstanding “fix” to our addiction! 7/5!!!!!!!!
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Yeah.... .460. Was a typo....thanks for the correction.
I actually own one that I personally accurized and micro/mirror polished the barrel (gun enthusiast is one of my hobbies) and reload my own with a 450 grain solid copper hollow point with a progressively burning powder (cartridge is about 3.75 inches long and almost .6 of an inch wide at the base). And yes....it is an awesome weapon. Have to shoot solid copper or brass bullets because lead will just melt in the barrel. Mine will now do .25 MOA 3 shot groups consistantly from a rest...which is about half the diameter of the bullet itself. It chrono's at 2,600 fps +/- 5 fps at the muzzle. I use fire formed brass, benchrest primers, and measure the powder down to the grain to get that accuracy level.
So, yeah...I know about the .460 ;-)

If you are going to go into such depth about non-plot related elements of your story, you really need to do the necessary research. You describe the character as able to shoot 1/4 groups at 400 yards with iron sights. There isn't a rifle used in the military capable of that kind of accuracy. That is roughly 1/16th of an MOA. In fact, the world record for a sporter rifle at 300 yards in benchrest (shooting sport where the entire goal is to achieve the smallest group possible, using HIGHLY specialized rifles and scopes) competition is 0.247. My point is, if you are going to put in those details, please make sure they are correct. The details won't be missed by someone who doesn't know the subject. For those of us who do know the subject well it is bothersome, and affects the flow of the story.

First I wanna say is that I’m a fan of the work that I’ve read of yours so far. And that I am no critic I am just a guy that reads six stories on the website and it has eternal writers block myself.
That being said I like the set up for Geo and his background to a certain point although he did seem a little gullible about how much porn in the book he read and then didn’t realize how much he would be desirable he’d be and up with the length of his equipment.
Then his sister being protective of him was one thing but then pretty much jumping his bones of the first Ativan was a warning flag to me. But after she enacted her playing with the twins he went from sort of geeky fun brother character to a bullying asshole in the span of a blink.
When he told the twins and then eventually his sister that he was going to breed them that kind of took me out of the story because it didn’t seem to jive with his attitude before him and his sister had sex.
He just didn’t read is this kind of automatically alpha male type jerk who was more of a bully then the people that bully him. And I have a deep part of me as a person who grew up as a good person myself for what he was dealing with an economy that took me out of the story a great deal when he turned into one.
Now the whole bringing these three girls thing also seems a little out of the blue and kind of the antithesis of a teenage boy. Why would any teenager even if they do have a BBC. Big brother cock, want to be saddled with two children by two girls who started off the story hating him and one by his own sister that just stretches believability even for a silly sex story.
And now positive things descriptions of your sex acts are very well done taking you to the count the logistics of someone having a Lexington Steele size dick. Geo started off as a guy I can see myself hanging out with what he turned into in Chapter 2 just kind of rub me the wrong way.
The mom she’s all right milf be Milfing. And the twins dad he seems all right to.
Overall I’m liking the story and I’m hoping things improve in the next few chapters but I’m gonna keep reading your work and I want nothing more than you continue to put these sex stories out for us horn dogs to read.